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Finished writing my play,,,
Started by Balthazar, Jun 26 2012 02:12 PM
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Posted 26 June 2012 - 02:12 PM
Hey, guys. After about a year of working on it, I finally finish my full first draft of my play. Anyone interested in reading and giving me some honest feedback? Won't hold it against you if not.
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Posted 26 June 2012 - 09:16 PM
I will read it with pleasure mate, thank you for the offer!.
I doubt I can tell you anything useful about the correctness of the Grammar, but I will fearlessly give you my opinion of the work from a readers interest point of view.
I doubt I can tell you anything useful about the correctness of the Grammar, but I will fearlessly give you my opinion of the work from a readers interest point of view.
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Posted 26 June 2012 - 09:19 PM
Avaunt, on 26 June 2012 - 09:16 PM, said:
I will read it with pleasure mate, thank you for the offer!.
I doubt I can tell you anything useful about the correctness of the Grammar, but I will fearlessly give you my opinion of the work from a readers interest point of view.
I doubt I can tell you anything useful about the correctness of the Grammar, but I will fearlessly give you my opinion of the work from a readers interest point of view.
Ah, thank you! PM me your email, please.
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Posted 26 June 2012 - 09:28 PM
Tried to, I think your message thing is too full or something.
Anyway, it is
antonyamclaren
at the hot mail dot com.
Anyway, it is
antonyamclaren
at the hot mail dot com.
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Posted 26 June 2012 - 09:41 PM
Yeah, I erased some mail. But the play was sent!
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Posted 26 June 2012 - 09:59 PM
I will read it tonight mate, I excitedly opened it and read a few lines . . . and a big smile spread on my face, this is exactly the sort of thing I like, story about stories, that winks at the reader and knows it is a story.
Thanks, looking forward to this mate!.
Thanks, looking forward to this mate!.
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Posted 29 June 2012 - 01:36 PM
Your review was very insightful. Thank you tremendously.
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Posted 11 July 2012 - 09:06 AM
Put me down for some storyreading. My email is palhel at gmail.
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Posted 11 July 2012 - 08:51 PM
Awesome! Email sent!
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Posted 14 July 2012 - 03:30 AM
Did you get the edited version I sent?.
I really hope so . . . arrrgh.
:)
I knew I should have kept a draft!.
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I really hope so . . . arrrgh.
:)
I knew I should have kept a draft!.
:tears:
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Posted 20 July 2012 - 06:03 PM
LOL! Thanks, Avaunt! I got it.
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Posted 20 July 2012 - 09:55 PM
Cool, rock on my young playwrite friend.
( Well, considering your gym work, maybe that should be " My buffed playwrite friend " =] )
( Well, considering your gym work, maybe that should be " My buffed playwrite friend " =] )
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Posted 23 July 2012 - 12:05 AM
And to me, if you would be so kind (I know I've promised you feedback on stuff in the past and then spectacularly, shamefully failed to get around to actually doing so, but I've got a bit more time on my hands in the next week or so).
Well done on finishing it, regardless. Keeping on at it is the most important thing you can do (take it from someone with far too many half-finished and abandoned projects of various sorts behind him...)
Well done on finishing it, regardless. Keeping on at it is the most important thing you can do (take it from someone with far too many half-finished and abandoned projects of various sorts behind him...)
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Posted 23 July 2012 - 04:30 PM
Thanks, Mark, it would be great to get your feedback!
Been getting some good feed and suggestions and thoughts. I'm going to try to fix up the ending a bit due to a collective response from readers thus far.
But yeah, you can PM me your email.
Been getting some good feed and suggestions and thoughts. I'm going to try to fix up the ending a bit due to a collective response from readers thus far.
But yeah, you can PM me your email.
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